Talk:Come to the Wired: Difference between revisions

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	I still have the impression that something needs to be added to this one. It seems empty. [[User:Amysteriousgal\|Amysteriousgal]] 13:12, 19 December 2012 (UTC)		I still have the impression that something needs to be added to this one. It seems empty. [[User:Amysteriousgal\|Amysteriousgal]] 13:12, 19 December 2012 (UTC)

			:Perhaps it could be a little longer, but I am liking the structure. I think ending the story at the ''"I let it all go."'' (basically leaving out the "aftermath") might have a nice, strong impact. --[[User:アラベスク\|アラベスク]] 15:07, 19 December 2012 (UTC)