Talk:Come to the Wired

There's no music designed into it right now - it's probably too short to warrant many tracks anyway, and in the spirit of Lain, most of the sounds are noise.

Does anyone think it's too short or paced strangely or anything? I might expand on some of those scenes, perhaps add some more dialogue... This story would be more suited to NVL mode, where the text fills the whole screen rather than just a box at the bottom, I think. Amysteriousgal 16:13, 15 December 2012 (UTC)

I still have the impression that something needs to be added to this one. It seems empty. Amysteriousgal 13:12, 19 December 2012 (UTC)

Perhaps it could be a little longer, but I am liking the structure. I think ending the story at the "I let it all go." (basically leaving out the "aftermath") might have a nice, strong impact. --アラベスク 15:07, 19 December 2012 (UTC)