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Does anyone think it's too short or paced strangely or anything? I might expand on some of those scenes, perhaps add some more dialogue... This story would be more suited to NVL mode, where the text fills the whole screen rather than just a box at the bottom, I think. [[User:Amysteriousgal|Amysteriousgal]] 16:13, 15 December 2012 (UTC)
Does anyone think it's too short or paced strangely or anything? I might expand on some of those scenes, perhaps add some more dialogue... This story would be more suited to NVL mode, where the text fills the whole screen rather than just a box at the bottom, I think. [[User:Amysteriousgal|Amysteriousgal]] 16:13, 15 December 2012 (UTC)
I still have the impression that something needs to be added to this one. It seems empty. [[User:Amysteriousgal|Amysteriousgal]] 13:12, 19 December 2012 (UTC)